Language Proficiency and Success
I. Thesis statement: Speaking proficiency will lead people to their success in career, interpersonal relation, and even in their whole life.
II. Career
A. Get job easily
B. Do job well
III. Interpersonal relation
A. Communicate with other people easily
B. Express oneself clearly
IV. Whole life
A. More confidence
B. More ambitions
V. Conclusion: If people have good speaking proficiency, they can success in their career, interpersonal relation, and in their whole life. Consequently, people should try their best to get this language proficiency to get more success in their life.
Recently, a survey shows that language proficiency has important relation to success. For example, good speaking proficiency will lead people to the success in their career, interpersonal relation, and even in their whole life.
First of all, good speaking proficiency will make people success in their career. People will get job easily by their good speaking proficiency. For instance, when a person has an interview with their boss, and if that person can make full use of his/her good speaking proficiency to show why the boss will hire him/her, that one will get job easily. In addition, having good speaking proficiency will lead people to do their job well. If a salesperson has good speaking proficiency, he/she can persuade his/her customers to deal business with him/her easier. Speaking proficiency is so important that it will help people success in their jobs.
Good speaking proficiency will also contribute people to have good interpersonal relation to other people. If a person has good speaking proficiency, he/she will communicate with other people easily because they can promote himself/herself plainly. Additionally, good speaking proficiency can be the reason for expressing people’s ideas clearly. If people can speak well, they will also have good proficiency in the organization, so they can express what they think clearly. Also, they can avoid unnecessary misunderstanding from other people. Therefore, good speaking proficiency can lead people to success in interpersonal relation.
Third, Good speaking proficiency will lead people to make success in their whole life. For example, if a person has good speaking proficiency, they will have more confidence than the person who doesn’t have this proficiency. People who have good speaking proficiency will be braver to express themselves, so they can get more chances to be successful than the people who don’t have this kind of language proficiency. Moreover, a person having good speaking proficiency means he/she really do something successful, and they must have more ambitions to success in other aspects. Since they have more ambitions to success, they will succeed easily. Hence, having good speaking proficiency plays a vital role in success to their whole life.
Having good speaking proficiency is essential in our life in many respects. If people have good speaking proficiency, they can success in their career, interpersonal relation, and in their whole life. Consequently, people should try their best to get this language proficiency to get more success in their life.
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I agree that it is important to have good speaking proficiency for everyone, and it is more important to communicate with other people successfully. Then, those topic sentences are good structures with parallel and the connectives are effective in your essay. But I do not understand that why someone having good speaking proficiency will have more ambitions in the thirteenth line of the fourth paragraph. There is not a common through ambitions and good speaking proficiency. Finally, the background of your essay is not very clear in the first paragraph. Maybe you should increase some situations as a lead to expressive your main ideas.
You convey these reasons of Language Proficiency and success very clearly. Every support sentence is perusable and easy to understand. Furthermore, every paragraph of the body’s length is average, there’s no one too long or brief, it makes the article look more comfortable. But you might notice that in the second paragraph line three, you may correct “their boss” to “his/her boss.” It’s just a little error that you might not find out.
You emphasize speaking proficiency plays a vital role to lead to succeed. But I think it is not only ability in language proficiency because reading, writing and listening are all important. In addition, your article organization is good. Every paragraph is very clear, and you make a conclusion on the end of every paragraph help me understand the main key.
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